I love the vibrant colours and all my family photos stuck on my wardrobe and how much room I have to store clothes etc. Most of the punctuation was good but there were a few mistakes like writing the word twice. The most famous poetic metaphor for love, which we find in Shakespeare, also involves heat. At the end of the expedition we leave a wonderful place and head back into the real world. eg Self fun. To your left is a white table for doing homework on. My carpet is quite old and has some stains on it from the previous, but most of my bed covers those stains.Some of my clothes are squashed up in my small drawers and most of good clothes are in my wardrobe. Very poor punctuation and vocabulary, sometimes it was very hard to follow what you where saying. I love the way you have proven that your room is one of your favourite places. Hey Chris good job I never knew about that Hulk thing though or seen it. The carpet is the only material on the floor in my bedroom. Williams Bedroom Description The carpet a deep chocolate brown to complement a pure white set of draws. You're spelling was really great, I don't think I found a single error. The darkness at specific times, so as I said it can get dark fast, I have to use my lighting module just to make it look like its still daylight, it gets annoying sometimes, you just got home and you go in your room and you cant find the light (By the way my hallway light is a sensor light). In my room there are lots of things to use like bop it and stuff like that. what is commonly misdiagnosed as pink eye. On one side is a three section wardrobe with most of my craft supplies in it. The movie is about a family trying to save their home (their castle) from developers who are trying to forcibly take it off them. Out my east facing window you can see the black and white calves frolicking through the lush green grass in the paddock and the different coloured cars zooming down Thompsons Track. The final part of the room is the space, the space of the room is kinda small which is a good thing because that mean that I can do cool ping pong trick shots. The house is an old homestead and the wood has a great chestnut kind of color. Next to that rug is my bean bag which is blue with a flame on it which is also blue. It lies to the left of the monitor on the desk and is covered with old homework and empty cups. All of this talking about my room reminded me of something, I need to clean it or Ill get banned from the Xbox. I wouldnt mind a bigger bed, though! I liked your ideas, you thought of ideas then typed in down on your google doc. It is facing the East, which means that in the morning you can see the sunrise from my window. But you made a lot of punctuation mistakes and spelling mistakes. The first thing about the layout in my room you notice is the large curtains covering the windows at the back and at the left of my room. I do 'nag' at you to clean your room. I think Hannah's story had lots of descriptive words and had good punctuation and spelling. My lampshade is very modern with its black and white zig zag pattern to match my zig zag patterned drawers. Feedback - It's good that you have the nouns and you have a bit of detail in them but add more. My bedroom is exactly the way I like it, there is a chair in the corner which is very comfortable. It may be the view of the mountain you see out my window or maybe the blue colour scheme or maybe even all the photographs on my crisp white walls. And it sits on the other side of the room! And now the style of my bedroom and what I love about it. My trusty pair of working socks, a tatty old picture of scooby-doo and last years embarrassing school photos. My colors, I like the choice of colors that are in my bedroom. Don't forget punctuation. It is filled with different kinds of art, photos and bedding. I look towards the mountain it is covered with the blinding white snow. With the windows closed it is a musty un-fresh smell and quite hot. This situation becomes extra annoying in the afternoon, where the sun is falling down to the horizon, which makes is way too bright when Im sitting at my desk and doing homework. You might use this metaphor if your brother and sister just argued all day long. No need to be fancy, just an overview. Megan your vocab was very good with describing things. I have fairy lights that are pink and gold, my desk is blue while my chair is a lime green. I LOVE THE DETAILED DESCRIPTION OF THE THINGS YOU CAN SEE OUT YOUR WINDOW. My most special thing in my bedroom is my glowing dragon it isnt very big but it lights up at night time and gives a bright glow of rainbow colors. It is dominated by rubbish, food plates, cups and dirty clothes. The layout, accessories, colours and the style. Beneath the mountain is a variety of my calves running in the evening sun. I am going to take you on a virtual expedition through my bedroom. Good description Annie. The color of the carpet is a dark grey which goes with the furniture and the color of the walls. [4] Smell origins may take the form of a noun (the smell of leather) or an adjective (a leathery smell). When in my room, its as though you are separated from the rest of the house, because it is much more colourful and decorative. Metaphor for a messy room crossword clue. Great descriptions and fun to read. My bedroom is a hyperbolic chamber. There is just the right amount of furniture in my room and it isnt too full or empty. In fact I love my bedroom it is the best. This is to say that one person (your mother, father, wife, husband) is the person who makes you feel most comfortable and relaxed. Warmth of a Smile (Simile) Jack likes listening to different stories of his Grandma, and when he speaks with her, Jack notices that lines around her mouth are like sun rays. This comparison illuminates the fact that his Grandma is a good-natured and kind person whose kindness warms like sun rays. My bedroom is in the end garage with the laundry in it. I like how you made them all simple but have a bit of depth. Ruebens bedroom I liked some of the words you used like; zooming, convenient and belongings. The furniture looks comfortable and inviting, as though it is begging for someone to take a seat. Your description was great I really liked the way that you told the reader little extra things about the sub heading. Nicely described George, your room is currently a blank canvas so you can do a lot with it. WILL HS BEDROOM I'm pleased you like your room Christopher. You could add more information on what each paragraph was. Curtains and carpet are the same grey colour, but the carpet is so soft you could sleep on it. All Rights Reserved. The most recurring feature would be its lovely and soft texture which you could possibly just lie on forever. The carpet is a soft grey colour with a squishy texture. When you look around my room you can see a whole bunch of different things, if you climb above all the dirty clothes, theres all of my furniture, my radiator and a whole load of colours. The first one is of peppers that I painted at Lauriston in year 4, that was the one that got ripped off the wall. You have some great ideas and I can get a really good visualisation of your room. If you have a brother or sister whos bedroom is usually dark and smelly, you perhaps might call their bedroom a swamp, too! Time for the most exciting part of it, the bed. Nevertheless your writing is lyrical, has rhythm and engages the reader. My wardrobe is unbelievably messy because theres so much stuff I have to fit in it, because my room is small compared to all the other rooms. The Five Imdb Parents Guide, Like maybe a gigantic , SHE HULK!, or maybe not but I love my room with all those fancy accessories. Under my bed is my large curved desk that has been bolted to the ladder, and then my tiny wardrobe which I can barely fit all my clothes into. Your spelling was mostly correct there were just a few words like duvet. With the blankets layered on top of me that are all different colours. Sen. Lindsey Graham cruises to reelection in S.C. Hickenlooper beats Gardner for Colo. Senate seat, 'Hamilton' star changes lyrics of song for voters, Trump signals he won't try to declare victory prematurely, Ex-NBA star Eddie Johnson dies at 65 in prison, Expert: A Biden win could lead to mask mandate, testing, Clothing items that may get you turned away from the polls, Jerry Jones: DiNucci's 1st NFL start was 'a lot for him', How Georgias blue drift changes politics nationwide, Battle intensifies over which votes will count. The mirror in my room is attached to my sister's dresser, around the edges of it has stickers that are half pulled off. You described your bedroom very well, but I feel your punctuation let you down a bit. Outside if you are lucky you can hear the birds chirping because my mum throws bread outside for the them to eat in the winter months. You might walk through all the different scenes of people playing and say, wow, my home has become a playground today!. It stinks like moldy cheese. So I would like to describe to you my own little world. Sometimes a little bit of exaggeration creates the best metaphors. With its concrete floor and the temporary plywood walls. ALYSSAS BEDROOM Everywhere you look, a dolphin peers back at you from the ethereal underwater scene of a poster. Like I mentioned before, my windows take up quite a lot of space, meaning that I don't have very much room for any other decorations. Now my layout I don't really like my layout but it's ok I guess but it can be better the reason I don't like it is my bed is too far away from my tv. as you described your room with a theme 'NBA' yes there are some elements of that but if you ask me, its not in plain sight! This is where I do my homework. My wardrobe is a double sliding door with a grey color. With the pastel colours and gold coloured curtains, it gives the room a lot of light. Great writing. Just like a zoo, her home has a lot of little creatures (okay, humans) running around doing their own thing. But on the other hand you could of give more ideas and elaborate more on the topic and it would be a better description. I think that your piece of writing was great! Posters are another thing people have in their room, in my room I have one poster of a 3D of a coral reef. well done kaden it does sound like your room. Also my carpet is brown. The color of it is a creamy vanilla look but its actually a bright yellow. Moving on from the layout of my bedroom to the layout of my walls. It's a great description but like Alex said, you could give it more ideas and elaborate more on the topic to make it a better description. They also allow a lot of sunshine to come in, no matter what the season. My favorite thing in my bedroom is my drums they are blue and black but look purple in the light. Big books and small books. I have a foam pillow, so my head just sinks in. I love it because it is the only room in my house where I can lock myself away from the rest of the world. We have a old square tv holder thingy that I used to swing on until I put a hole in the wall, its still there. In the distance you can see the woolshed, it is made out of corrugated iron, like the chook shed it is pretty messy on the inside though. The next thing you eyes will find is my small black bedside table. On the door it has my name (Will) and other things I made in hard materials. I have a brown drawers to keep all of my clothes in. Well in my bedroom I have blue and white walls. Once you eyes have shifted again you will see my big, pure white chest of draws in the right hand corner of the room pressed firmly against both the right hand wall and the wall with the window in front of you. My room is filled with colours I love like yellow, green and BLUE. Next time your could probably add some more descriptive words, not saying that there was not any but just add some more in like more bigger descriptive words. A strange smell like no other. It also has another mattress underneath that has wheels on it. One of my most treasured items in my bedroom is a large canvas painting of a multi coloured elephant that sits above my pink beanbag. I thought you could have added more adjectives to describe the objects you talked about (such as the Lego and drums) but I loved how you used words such as wade instead of walk, avalanche instead of fall and navigate instead of look/travel. Very descriptive though - well done! Christina Moses Weight Loss, It is sunny and bright, and shows off my disposition. I would give you a rubric R4 mark. A stout red beanbag accommodates a spot near the middle of the room. Very well written i liked the word choices and how you alborated on it, there was nothing that I could find that needed work i would give you a 4+, Very good way of describing room. I liked how you took the audience on a trip around your room. Next time try used some words less for example the word 'and'. 9 years ago. Brothers Of A Feather Driving Wheel Lyrics, Tropical, Sporty, Comfy, Tidy and Spacious. You only had three simple senses that were not very detailed and I think you could have added more detail about the noise and smell and sight in your room. Finally I have color so most of my room is a cream color because my walls and roof it that color. The furniture in my room is rather basic. Tattoo Aftercare Saniderm, So my layout might be tight, but it works for me. I have to share my room with two other people and its kind of small in width. Penultimate par5agraph the full stop at the end goes inside of the brackets. Your writing was amazing and I didn't find any spelling mistakes. At the foot of my bed there is a built in wardrobe with lots of clothes and at the foot of my sisters bed theres the entrance to the room and the door to the en suite. Which I have owned for a year now but it is really loud. Thirdly, the colors. Islas Bedroom Description Is your bedroom like mine dirty and smelly. On the very top of my tall draws of my dressers are a couple of drink bottles, along with a cup I got from netball this season. My curtains are white with a see through sort of material over top. My bedroom is the room straight ahead of the hallway it has the great things that most bedrooms have a theme, colors, bed and a carpet and those are the four topics I will tell you about. MY BEDROOM I really liked that you used some really great words that have me hooked in. She could have added the fact that we live in a Lockwood home which is why the walls are made of wooden planks. My mini drawers has three drawers on top of each other with the middle one being slightly longer than the others. My pillows and duvet are very colourful but you can hardly ever see what they look like because I almost never make my bed so unless someone else does all the duvets and pillows have been thrown on the floor or are inside out. I get a feeling you're into sports and really like cosy spaces. It gives a very accurate picture of Sophie's room. The sheets of my bed are blue black, white with a bit of gray for the frame of the bed. On it there are two pictures both a light green in background with pink and yellow tulips. It is also nice to curl up with a book or bask in the afternoon sun. The layout of the room has a facing direction pointing at the north east with side on single beds one near the huge closets and one across near the sliding windows for the sun to enter. Sophies Bedroom The colour and brightness are perfect in mostly every way possible. It has three drawers with coloured red, yellow and green and they hold some of my clothes. The size is a king single. The colors of my room are dark and a little bit of white. Now you can go to your room and make it the way you want it and design it the way you like it. Sometimes in the mornings it can be really cold but when that heat pump goes on it makes it better. A metaphor for home explains your feelings about your home by using figurative language. Youd need to think of something your home reminds you of: a zoo, a swamp, a castle, or a zen retreat. Then, you can say your home is a zoo (or a swamp or a classroom, or whatever!) in order to create the perfect metaphor to describe your home. 1. The colour. From my green reading lamp to my dart board, my patterned roman blinds and funky hooks on the wall. By William Middleton. The layout of my room is your everyday large square room allowing a big area to dot items around, such as a bright white, built in wardrobe, a comforting king single or the small baby blue couch. Overall I am hoping my parents will be convinced that my room needs a change like some new sheets on my bed, some colour on the wall and to get rid of that useless desk. But if I could change one thing it would be to have it all to myself, that way I would be able to sleep in on the weekends. Usually when I have to make space/ tidy my room I put stuff in the wrong place. You have used good related descriptive words. I have to admit though mum doesn't like the amount of time I spend in it. I am proud of this layout, despite the occasional spots of untidiness. I like the feel, the carpet, my bed and the size of it. After a long day, all i want to do is go up tom my cosy bedroom and either listen to some mellow music, or lie down, unwind and watch a bit of T.V or maybe even a relaxing film. I go in, close my eyes, breathe deep, and the world goes away. I think it is awesome you describe things in you bedroom so well and I saw it so clear in my head. SOPHIES BEDROOM Its a good description of your room but could be a little bit better because of the spelling grammer. Although in the second paragraph you could have stated what you were talking about a bit better. No i have to go and clean up my room. The sun shines through my room during the day and makes my room look light. One area that you could work on is maybe not repeating things and making sure that what you say makes sense. What a great description of your beautiful bedroom! I am fond of the fact that it is my own place, and that everything is just right. My bedroom layout includes two sets of windows, both made with with grey aluminium and double glazed glass. It was a great story. Overall I love my room to pieces because it belongs to me. And the last of my accessories is the bulletin board. Also two comfy blue headphones and it's sound is great as well I have had this for a few months now. My room has two windows, one facing south, the other west. Third, the accessories, a lot of the accessories are gaming related like Pokemon and Call of Duty and theres my lighting module. Secondly are my accessories I have many accessories in my room but there is three that stand out to me my PS4, tv and Headset. What I would really like though is some more storage because there is not a lot of space to put my belongings. Under this window is my computer desk with a small draw and a slot for a keyboard giving a nice place to work. The layout of my room is made so everything can fit. 4, I like how you describe where the objects in your room where. My bed is really soft and comfy, just the way I like it. Mine is to the right of the door and facing it, whereas Sams is directly in front of the door facing towards it too. Both beds are king single, with 3-4 pillows and very comfy sheets. I cant find much bad things about your description writing. You can see the green and purple lettuce growing in the sauna like glass house and the drenched clothes hanging on the washing line. 2. as far apart as the poles. George Wareing 8WH. Then to the right of my wardrobe is my tv cabinet which is a light brown wooden cabinet and it holds the usual tv, PS4 and XBOX 360 Being next to it gives me a warm feeling. and there is no conclusion or ending paragraph. This simile is used to describe the letters Roland and Maud find at Seal Court, in Christabel's You have elaborated on your ideas and have given the reader evidence why it is like that. My room isnt colourful. I think that it is still also good to keep using basic words. I have two windows in my room and in between my two windows is my messy bed which has a leather like material. My room is the perfect size for all my things and for me and thats how I like it. Your paragraphs could of been a bit bigger, I like your ideas and you described it really wall. So I think that I don't really have a style because it just a bit of everything some old stuff and some new stuff. These are 5 words you would use to describe my bedroom. What Type Of Muzzleloading Firearm Is The Most Popular And Most Commonly Used Among Hunters Today? My big white, tall bookshelf is next to the window. However some of your paragraphs didn't make any sense. People who work from home might have a big computer setup with large monitors, webcams, and microphones. Other than for sleeping I use my bedroom to do my homework (at my desk), catch up with all the goss on social media and of course as a space to be alone for a little while. You have described your room well and I can paint a picture. But there are some things that I would really like to change like my bed would be better if it was double size and maybe a little bit of colour on my walls would make it much better. My room has a modern style to it because of the things I have in it. Your mother or father might have taught you a lot of dishes to cook or given you a lot of games to play to help your brain. I suck creamy cock. Feedback - I read through this twice and couldn't find and spelling mistakes, and lower-case I's nothing this is great! MY BEDROOM I really liked that you had some really awesome words in your writing that really hooked me in and made it more intresting to keep on reading along. You could have added some more descriptive words in there. Secondly the lighting, at four oclock my room is almost pitch black and its so damp and cold. When I sit in bed with my eyes peeking out of my blanket it makes me wonder if something scary is hiding behind the box. need for descriptive words. I ventured into my room, with the sunshine streaming in. It all fits nicely in my room and nothing looks too squished. You could add information on what you think about your room and why you like it. You really made me think of what your room would've looked like with your little brothers toy box and with the bog window and the red wall. 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